Government wants control.
>>> Bad opening as it puts the reader, the govt, immediately on the defensive
Switzerland one of the highest Assault weapons ownership in the world has minor crime in comparison.
>>> One, clarification and definition needed on "assault". I think it would be better to illustrate how semi automatic rifles are not "assault" weapons. Two, we need to double check the figures on Switzerland and also be very careful about any causal relationships we try to establish by analogy.
Education is fundamental in deterring gun violence.
>>> True statement.
President Obamas agenda to Disarm Americans now pushing for Extreme Measures.
>>> Inflamatory remark. Will be counterproductive.
If this administration succeeds we will fall like many other nations who had their guns taken away.
>>> Sounds like tin foil hat talk.
FBI data shows most murders are done with handguns which Obama fails to mention plague in his home town Chicago with the Strictest Gun Laws.
>>> Undoubtedly true (reference suggested). Should also be worded in a manner that doesn't try to place blame.
Nothing ever said about how many crimes are averted due to gun ownership.
>>>This is also generally true. It is also statistically hard to quantify.
In 2010 only 358 rifles were used Yet 1704 Knives were used to kill someone Yet 6009 Handgunns were used according to the Authorities.
>>> What is the conclusion that the author is trying to draw with this? It sounds like it is making a case for banning handguns.
Allow this to happen and only Criminals will have guns.
>>> this sounds cliche, but it is true. We should find a way to better phrase this.
Object to the Assault weapon Ban
>>> This is the objective.